Friday, October 7, 2011

Blog #12 Michael Parente

Please let me know what you think about my first couple paragraphs. I will update as I go through the drafting and revising process.


  1. First of all the format needs to be changed into MLA for the heading (double spaced) other than that, you have a great start:) Your introduction is strong and with the research to back it up, you can have a really great paper.
    In your first paragraph your number 13470 needs a comma after the 3. Other than that your beginning research is strong.
    I can't wait to see where your research takes you! Keep up the good work.

  2. Great start to the essay. This can turn into a very well written essay with the right research and effort added. Good start.