Friday, October 7, 2011

Blog #12 Taylor Wisnieski

please critic this as much as possible!


  1. I like how you found info on both sides of the story and then chose a final point. There are a few sentences that are worded funny, maybe try reading it out loud to make sure everything flows. But besides that everything looks good!

  2. Make sure the info in works cited is double-spaced, but other than that looks great! You did a great job showing your thinking process and opinion. The opening paragraph was especially powerful because you had a direct connection to the people. I was definitely interested from that to see what you had to say on the subject--good job!!