tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1521031637921027810.post4334220186842280674..comments2023-04-12T05:34:20.638-04:00Comments on The Green Room: Blog #12 Michael ParenteBryan A. Lutzhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01126783405508845024noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1521031637921027810.post-39321893409157603212011-10-09T21:36:06.963-04:002011-10-09T21:36:06.963-04:00Great start to the essay. This can turn into a ver...Great start to the essay. This can turn into a very well written essay with the right research and effort added. Good start.brianwalbornhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02147691626446708639noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1521031637921027810.post-65584110982563246882011-10-09T18:17:30.988-04:002011-10-09T18:17:30.988-04:00First of all the format needs to be changed into M...First of all the format needs to be changed into MLA for the heading (double spaced) other than that, you have a great start:) Your introduction is strong and with the research to back it up, you can have a really great paper. <br /> In your first paragraph your number 13470 needs a comma after the 3. Other than that your beginning research is strong.<br /> I can't wait to see where your research takes you! Keep up the good work.Courtney Adamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03727499645076467531noreply@blogger.com